why everything feels damaged.
Why constantly weeping eyes leave you empty and lifeless.
Why there is darkness so dense that you see no light.
Why the misery drowns you in a lethal abyss.
Why is there no hope.
Why does the life become an eternal void.
Why is failure so defined.
Why do we lose even before the battle starts.
Why the thorns of life make us bleed so profusely and leave us lifeless.
Why the dark thunderous clouds cover the sky.
Why the storm never subsides.
Why is there no sunshine. . . .. . .
Shouldn’t the first line be ‘ why everything feels damaged’? but you know better what you wanted to write.
Nice poem otherwise.๐
I’d suggest deleting this comment after you read it, if you wish.
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hey I rectified it. Thank u so much. I really appriciate that u pointed it out. If I accept all the praise, then why not any suggestions and that too constructive. ๐ thanks for reading. and of course I never delete any such comments. I find it even better, as they say to err is human. ๐
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It was my pleasure๐
Really appreciate your honesty
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Thank u so much.. ๐ :).
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Bcoz of law of nature or karma.. everything also so destined to be happening while lesser mortals pass through these ” WHYs ” totally ignorant n clueless! At times the relative prospective at looking at things creates more ” WHYs” , a beautiful search through words.Amazing! Blessings.
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thank u so much for sharing your truthful and deep thoughts.. and reading my work.!
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Most welcome .
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Beautiful work though there are endless “Why” in our heart & minds only came over on pages..haha๐๐
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I swear… when u start typing all why emerge.. ๐
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Haahaa…why๐
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Because you don’t have a window in your room ! (If you get it)
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but the window has long been closed. . . .!!
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Then it’s just a matter of time to open the window!
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may be you’re right. !!
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Cool if you get it.
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isnt this one side of the story…
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this is just what I see… for me may be it is The whole story…….
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oh..no.. there will be a day
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probbably. Thanks for your kind words. ๐
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Understandable post. I have nothing much to say. ๐
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๐ ๐
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I can relate. ๐
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Open your eyes
Look up to the sky
There’s never a forever thing
The clouds will subside
The sun will rise. ๐
I hope it’s not cheesy! ๐
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they won’t…. EVER..!!
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talking about the clouds/storm?
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yeah…..
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Well! I hope you are wrong and I’m sure I’ll be there when the clouds disappear to show you the clear sky.
But, you know, these black clouds, they do bring out the poets in all of us, don’t they? Sad, but true! ๐
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I hope u are right. But for now the clouds have obliterated everything..!! yes sadness does bring out some deep emotions.. ..!!
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Whatever it is, I hope it gets over soon. But, it will, believe me. There’s a beautiful song called “There’s never a forever thing” by A-h. Blissful music and beautiful lyrics. I hope it gives you strength ’cause it works for me ๐
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thank u so much for being sweet as ever.. ๐ will check it out
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I’m sorry, the group’s name is A-ha. And, mention not. Do check it out. ๐
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sure thing.. ๐
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Nice
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Thanks
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Love your blog check out mine & follow please Young Journey โ
https://youngjourneysite.wordpress.com/
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sure. ๐ thanks.
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Great words. ๐๐ป
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thank u ๐
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